finished a new song (ambient metal) - feedback appreciated

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Hi,

I finished a new song. I used the metal AdPak on this.
This is still a rough mix.
Any kind of constructive criticism (on the song itself, the playing, the mix, anything...) is very much appreciated.

http://soundcloud.com/larsbauer/metal-9-2-2-mix1-01

Thanks,
Lars